First of all, I need to admit that I only made it to about 10% of the book before I quit reading. Some of you might feel like that makes me unqualified to review, and that’s fair. But since there were enough things that irked me in the first 10% of the story that I was able to write LOTS of words about it, I’m gonna go ahead and rant and review. (Plus it’s my blog and no one is the boss me, so...yeah. There’s that.)
Let the ranting begin…
Head hopping, for those of you who don’t know, is when the author hops from one character’s point of view to another within the space of a paragraph or page. Now, that’s not to be confused with a dual point of view story. Most authors who tell dual point of view stories switch points of view every chapter—and a bunch of them clearly call out which point of view each chapter is told from in the chapter headings. But head hopping is much less common, and WAY more headache inducing. Only super talented authors can pull it off successfully. (Nora Roberts can do it, for example) And in the case of THIS book, I’m not entirely sure the head hopping was an intentional stylistic choice. I think it might have been an error, which is a totally rookie writing mistake that an editor should have caught before publication. There shouldn’t be 2 different points of view represented in a single paragraph ever, and I noticed it happening several times within the first 10% of this story.
Speaking of editing…
And while I’m on the topic of editing, this one has LOTS of grammar and spelling errors. There are parts where I’m pretty sure the French text used in dialogue is wrong, too. It should be said, also, that I’m not a grammar Nazi. I only point out spelling and grammar errors when they’re egregious, so for ME to notice that the editing in this one was lacking...well, imagine what’d happen to a grammar nerd who gave this one a read. (*head exploding*)
Damsel in distress
Even in the first 10% of the story, Chloe needed Ethan to rescue her, only she never admitted it. She insisted (stubbornly) that she had everything under control, even though she CLEARLY didn’t. I have no problem with a heroine who needs help from time to time, but a good heroine admits when she needs help and THANKS the person who helps her. A craptastic heroine pouts when she’s rescued and snaps at her rescuer for daring to interrupt a situation that she wanted to handle on her own. (*cough*Chloe*cough*)
Odds and ends
So, long-story-short, I couldn’t bring myself to finish this one. There was just no way I could overlook the problems I found so early on in the story. If I’d read the whole thing, I imagine the resulting review would’ve been 10 pages long and REALLY grumpy sounding. I didn’t want to subject y’all to that. You’re welcome.
Full disclosure: I received an ARC from NetGalley in exchange for an honest review.
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